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Comments Thank you so much! I try to let the images speak for themselves, which is why it may seem a bit vague. But that tells me that even if I know what the images mean, it doesn't mean everyone else will.
I write free verse specifically because I believe in the power of imagery. I like what I can say without directly saying it. I appreciate you taking the time to do a critique. I cannot thank you enough.  Yea, I guess it just took a little getting used to the vagueness that is, i'm used to all the deviants spelling everything out which actually results in a more boring less mystical less interesting poem so i really like what you've done here even though I bulked at first as it made me think harder lol
no problem!  It was the first critique that i've done  Well, thanks for trying out your critique skills on me!
The idea behind the 'vagueness' is that I need to give you the essential details, but the other details (such as the room, the location, time of day, sounds in the room, etc) are for you to fill in with your imagination so that you relate to it better. Maybe you think they're in a restaurant, maybe you think they'r at a club, and maybe you think they're in a ballroom. It doesn't matter, as long as you relate to the setting and then get the images/feelings that I focused on. Mhm, like I said at first I was doubtful but the more I read, I realized it's brilliance!
A good lesson to me as I am a poet as well |
Sta.sh
This poem really made me think, although some people may have a hard time getting it
In the beginning stanza i was confused as to what was happening ..
and a lot of this poem was very vague...
And now I see the power the vagueness does to this poem it really makes you think so you display excellent technique.
The poem is very raw simple, and at the same time complex, brilliant!
My favorite part was
opportunity
flows closer
and I buy it
a glass of wine
soooo brilliant, this abstraction!