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Pride
Nervous
Sick, stupid
Worried they’ll think
You are dumb, useless
Building a wall between
Acquaintance and a friendship
It controls thoughts and opinions
So you can’t make the right decisions
Pride, it’s fear, it’s ego, it’s mind control
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Written by Roselyn Edwards
Status: Rough Draft
Form: Etheree
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~5SilverFingers Dec 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I like the creativity how each line has one more syllable than the last. Very nice. And the topic is quite a strong one at that.
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*roselynedwards Dec 8, 2012  Student Writer
thanks it was a trial run of that type of form so im glad it turned out alright ! thanks for commenting! :D
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~5SilverFingers Dec 8, 2012  Student General Artist
You're very welcome. :iconchristmaslightplz:
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=DragonsChest Nov 25, 2012  Professional Writer
Like the poetry form, looks fun...
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*roselynedwards Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
thanks
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=DragonsChest Dec 1, 2012  Professional Writer
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*Everlasting90 Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's so true. Wow.
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*roselynedwards Nov 25, 2012  Student Writer
that's just how it feels to me. thanks for the comment!
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