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Kiss me, just kiss me
Put your lips on mine,
Just kiss me.

Feel the pressure condescending
All the pleasure, it's never ending
Undermines reality, that's filtering in
Kiss me now, pleasure, it's not a sin
All my passion, touch and feel
Your response has released its seal

Breathe me, just breathe me;
Put your mouth on mine,
And just breathe me.

Feel the warmth, it fills you
My sweet breath, it kills you
Just open, your lungs and breathe,
All the passion that you conceive
Swallowing intoxication,
Just feeling now the wild provocation

Taste me, just taste me;
Put your tongue on mine,
And just taste me.

Feel my skin so luxurious,
Making you all furious
Your mind beyond this fragile world
It's filled with me and then I'm hurled
Taste me, all my sweet surrender
And my tongue so soft it's tender

Kiss me, just kiss me
Breathe me, just breathe me
Taste me, just taste me
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Written by Roselyn Edwards
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=DragonsChest Sep 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I love what you have here, and can't wait to see the finished product...
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*roselynedwards Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
thanks :)
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=DragonsChest Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
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~DomHiten Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is an excellent poem.
It made me think of mermaids under water. When you kiss them, breathe them, and taste them, then you drown.
Falling in love is very similar.
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*roselynedwards Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
First of all thank you !
And I think it's cool that my poem made you 'think'
Although the original intention of the poem was not about mermaids that's an excellent observation! And kiss me never had anything about drowning or the down side of love in it...and i want to keep it that way :)However, your observations are intriguing it's cool to see how different people perceive a poem totally different than another person based on their experiences in life.
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~DomHiten Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well I look forward to more of your work :)
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wow this is fantastic. I just loved it!
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Mood: Joy *roselynedwards Sep 15, 2012  Student Writer
awww thanks :) u've been so encouraging
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:iconsquibblyquill:
it's my pleasure as always
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