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There is a place of beauty, a place of splendor;
Where streams flow and silken meadows glow,
Flowers dance as little treasures;
Excitement, of coming spring , undue measures.

In this place, everything so bright,
No darkness, nor night;
Tears will be like diamonds,
Memoirs from your past.

Mountains high, and valleys low
Will speak their words, held so long,
Birds, never lose their song;
They'll sing harps of gold,
Making soft melodies unfold.

Laughing, unrestrained, pure, and wholesome,
Like the cheer that crystal brooks hum,
While trickling over the silvery stones,
Resulting in a host of illustrious tones.

The winds, whisper soothingly through the willows,
As if reminiscing of good times they'd had;  
While laying their heads softly down on their pillows,
Seeming to communicate how they are glad.

Life always fresh, reborn each day,
Special in every little way,
And shouts and joy in morning,
Leaping freedom as all dance adorning.

Death taken, shook up and thrown down
Death lost, it's been beaten to the ground,

Love true as the eastern sun's hue,
Sparkling and shining like snow in the night;
Love, the warmth of the day,  proof we're new,
In hearts of every soul here burning bright.

Streets and walls will never see blood,
Never feel beatings from bombs or shells,
Or get coated in thick skinned mud;
No screaming pain or torment; none of those hells.

Just no limits, no bounds,
To peace, joy, gold and  crowns,
Rewards and great prizes will be given
Because all has been forgiven!

One day dare to cross death waters,
One day dare to enter Celestial doors,
To be one of the Son's daughters
The thought takes wing and soars.
Literature type: Free verse Poem
Status: Final Draft
Written by: Roselyn Edwards
Note to Reader:Ok I've made the final edits to this one, let me know what you think, does it flow? or does it still seem choppy?
And does it seem silly?
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I think your word flow is excellent; no choppiness that I noticed. I love the imagery provided in this piece. Your use of metaphors was controlled and used in the proper places. Spring is my favorite season and you portrayed the beauty, warmth, and birth of the season beautifully. You captured every aspect of the season and the emotions that people feel during the season. I also have to agree that this poem is quite exquisite, as said in a previous comment. You never fail to amaze me when you write. Your use of language is well crafted. You never disappoint!
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FlipswitchMANDERING Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
great poem
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
thanks although it is sort of cliche
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FlipswitchMANDERING Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
excellent writing, and painting imagery with words is never cliche.
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
thank you! :)
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SeekHim Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I've always been fascinated with Heaven! :)

GOD bless
John 3:16
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
me too! :)
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your choice in word :3 It's really good.
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Manigran Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! Just exquisite.
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :) I loved writing this one but I don't think i did it quite justice.
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Manigran Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you did it justice.
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