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Dying to be beautiful
How far does it go
How deep can it get
How dark can it pull

When nothing holds you together
But layers of makeup on sunken cheeks
And your bones so frail they
Shatter from sobbing
Your heart so weak
You cannot risk loving

Your world so painful,
Through gray misty eyes
From the outline of ribs
To the protruding bone spines
I clearly see, you’re dying
Yes, dying to be beautiful

I wish somebody would tell you
The secret of beauty
It comes from the heart
The inside out
Not the outside in


But still how far will you go
How deep will you get
How dark will you go
Until you realize
You’re dying
Just to beautiful
Written by Roselyn Edwards
Status: Final Draft
Additional Comments: Let me know if it flows and does it need more rhymes?
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
really good one! I would say really realistic.... Well done!
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Student Writer
I feel honored that you read some of my poems thank you ! :)
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Everlasting90 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very evocative!
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Wrote a similar poem once called 'The Mirror Lies.' I can empathize for sure...
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
hmm sometime you'll have to show me your poem too!
and thanks means a lot to me.
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Trog-dog Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I wish all girls could understand this, and not listen to what Hollywood says.
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Deedeekinz Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
I guess that's what most of us are doing..sadly but true.. just dying to be beautiful..

thank you for such an amazing and sweet poem, I hope one day we will all realize that beauty is from the heart, inside out like u mentioned
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
yea this is something I've struggled with personally so i understand how difficult it is ...
i'm just finally starting to get that beauty is internal not external, it really is, as a society we've been lied to so much by the media, and im not blaming the media because quite honestly i don't think they even begin to grasp what they are doing to people and if they do shame on them, the good news is we are the society we are a part of it and we need to start making our stand, standing up for ourselves and who we are not for how we look or what we do.
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Deedeekinz Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
yeah you're right, I wldnt blame the media though, it's more the way we look at things, the media might influence our decisions and thinking but at the end it's our own minds that see things how they do.
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