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I’m here in my head
Existing amongst the dead
Life is being taken
Things are mistaken
It seems people run voluntarily to misery
As though pretending, the nonexistence of history
All eyes seem jaded, or intensely blind
A wonder to them how the world will unwind
Continue to watch them, try and stop them
Pull them away by the strings of their hem
Try to save them, but you’ll be the ignorant fool
Sincerely they believe you’re the devil’s tool
They cannot see how the devil masquerades
Conning to enlist them in his festering charades
To fight against the right
To fight against the light
To fight against our joy
By playing with humanity like it’s a toy
Preconditioned, pre-programmed
To listen and be reconditioned
With a baby spoon fed each bite
Spoon by spoon, evidentially knowing, no right
The appetizer, conformity
The Desert, uniformity
Just prisoners of the original
Life of the adaptional
Code word for mundane
Of people trapped in the conformity chain
I cannot exist amongst the dead
I must scream out wildly instead
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Written by Roselyn Edwards
Status: Final Draft
Form: Couplet
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:icondragonschest:
=DragonsChest Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Interesting to read...
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:iconroselynedwards:
*roselynedwards Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
...that bad huh
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:icondragonschest:
=DragonsChest Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
No silly, the other way around... :hug:
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:iconevelynnorth:
Is it weird that I read this in a sort of spoken word/rap style? Because it fit that beat really well (I make beats in my head a lot). Also, the concept of the conformity and blindness a lot of people choose is a really relatable subject. I like that you didn't just make it one-sided though because a person would be ignorant if they thought they could try and change a person like that's mind.

Well done overall. :)
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*roselynedwards Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
nahh whatever works for you :) And thanks I enjoyed reading your comment :)
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!VLoneV Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No words...complete awe
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*roselynedwards Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks I most appreciate your opinion; you are an awesome person I'm sure!
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:iconvlonev:
!VLoneV Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ Thanks and you're very welcome!
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:iconsapph1repo3t:
I love this poem, gr8 job!
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*roselynedwards Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
wow thanks :) I really appreciate you taking the time to read it, that means a lot to me.
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